So I'm going to re-write chapter nine slightly.  I am also going to try to add more detail and dialogue (did I spell that wrong?) because the book is going to end up being only 100 pages long and that's no fun.  I want it to be the size of a normal book.  I don't know what a normal book is, though.  Maybe the size of The Lightning Thief.  That's a good sized book and a very good story.

I was re-reading this book called Writing Magic by Gail Carson Levine and it's all about writing Fantasy.  There is this one chapter called Suffer and it's all about how you've got to make your characters suffer because that's what makes people read more.  I counted how many times I make the main characters suffer in the first book.  This is a rough count:

Katrina: 2
Sarah-anne: 1
Lily: 3
Jacob: 13

Aw, poor Jacob.  He's everyone's favorite character, too.  I never really got that, though.  My favorite's are Lily and Katrina, but I realized that I don't talk about them much, so I need to fix that.  I'll add another chapter about what they're up to, and I think I'll add another chapter that talks about the characters before this whole vampires, dark magic, kidnapping problem happens, to show how strong a friendship they have.

And you guys  are thinking right now "What is she talking about?"

Yeah, you'll see some day, hopefully.

-Shannie

p.s. I got a manicure and pedicure and i haven't destroyed it yet!  I have the worst nails on the planet (my sister has the best) and last time I got a manicure, it was destroyed before I left the building.